deep and dark
full of anger
full of rage
it crashes the rocks
it slams the shore
it batters everything
in it's path
the rain comes swiftly
with the blowing wind
it beats
it retreats - it ends
the calm comes in
spreading
lightly touching
all is soothed
the clouds part slowly
intentionally
distant and then gone
light moves in
the sky begins to glow
it brightens
it shines
it sparkles brilliant blue
the river slows
to a lazy roll
the storm passed
lays dormant
until next time
Slice of Life Writing Challenge - Day 18 - hosted by Ruth and Stacey at Two Writing Teachers.
I love your descriptions! I could totally get the pictures in my head.
ReplyDeleteLove your verbs! I could visualize that violent river in the beginning, then the peacefulness of it at the end. Cool!
ReplyDeleteI think I'm taking this as a metaphor for something not so good, an argument perhaps, then a soothing with the light of understanding. You may not intend this, but I love that poetry can show much to the reader. Elsie is right, the verbs are good--"crashes the rocks/slams the shore". Thanks!
ReplyDeleteThe beauty/mystery of water. I can actually see the river and all that surrounds it.
ReplyDeleteI liked, "the clouds part slowly, intentionally." I could see them being pulled apart, almost like someone wiped them away.
ReplyDelete"it beats
ReplyDeleteit retreats - it ends"
I agree that your verbs are wonderful, and I especially love the rhythm of these two lines!
My favorite stanza was:
ReplyDeletethe rain comes swiftly
with the blowing wind
it beats
it retreats - it ends
:)
I love rivers, I even love the word river - it just flows and melts on your tongue. This was a moving poem.
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