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Adrift
Sailing on the open sea
Set adrift alone
Rolling over waves
Crashing toward the shore
Pulling, dragging, out again
Toss the boat
Rock and dip
Pushing toward the shore
The constant battle has waged
The winner not seen
Still more drifting
Floating, sifting
Thundering toward the shore
And for fun...the same poem as a word cloud (created using Wordle).
And for fun...the same poem as a word cloud (created using Wordle).
Funny how a poem is born from nothing. Very powerful words sending that boat on its way.
ReplyDeleteSeems to be about life. Nice.
ReplyDeleteI love the contrasts of pushing and pulling. This is very powerful because it is undefined. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Patricia, seems to be about life.....I like it:-)) A lot!
ReplyDeleteReally enjoyed this and also the wordle, so fun!
ReplyDeletethe wordle emphasizes what is important, I think, moving 'towards shore', maybe towards contentment? However it arrived, it's amazing with the images!
ReplyDeleteYou have some cool wordplay working here -- "adrift alone rolling over" starts with a's and then rolls into the 'o' sound. "Rolling, crashing, pulling, dragging", then later "drifting, floating, sifting, thundering" -- some sneaky rhyme stuck in there! These sections create a rolling feel, a sense of motion -- a perfect fit for what you're trying to convey. Nice! :)
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